Would this work for adult books or even children? I started this new story I keep changing the way it all begins! is it any good? thank you in advance!

(Far, far away, long ago, where winter snow detached a little town behind high mountains. There, lived a large loving family of five boys and five girls, their newlywed brother, his wife and their parents. Their two-story town house was filled with laughter, and the fireplace kept them warm. There was never a dull day, or boredom.)

Grace (Samah)